This, by the way, is why I almost never comment on snaps. For me the
point of them is that they're hot off the brain-pan, whatever they
might look like eventually. There's a lovely freedom in being able to
pass these along.
Mark
At 11:41 AM 5/17/2007, you wrote:
>It may be the whole poem. But I wait a long time before I think of
>revisions or even whether something's a keeper.
>
>Mark
>
>At 11:29 AM 5/17/2007, you wrote:
>>enjoyed them both, Mark, but especially the final stanza here, that
>>joining, . . . those aerodynamics....
>>
>>Doug
>>On 16-May-07, at 2:34 PM, Mark Weiss wrote:
>>
>>>This here aint no
>>>pitter patter storm
>>>Mr. Kern, upon us suddenly
>>>from the south,
>>>the sky become
>>>a large green threat. A shame,
>>>though, to close the windows,
>>>and lose the sweet breeze.
>>>
>>>I have joined
>>>for the moment
>>>the complex aerodynamics
>>>of leaves.
>>Douglas Barbour
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>>
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>>
>>
>>Peace isn't even as good a sales item
>>as poetry.
>>
>> W. H. Ferry
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