sure thing.
thanks all
KS
On 05/05/07, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> For me this is about somebody and something loved,
> seen in the stars and the rain and the change of seasons.
> (When people ask me to explain my poems I often say,
> what's it about for you?)
>
> "Wet beads on godskin" is a great phrase.
>
> I agree the 4th line is clunky, with that ", &".
> You might as well have a full stop there.
> Not sure about "strains" and "clinks" either -- odd choice
> of verbs. "Clinks"? Coins in a pocket? Chains?
>
> Janet
>
> > "cassiopeia"
> >
> > Water sang in the sky as if in a cave,
> > Wet beads on godskin pulsing to sugar:
> > While spring strains, this ceremony clinks.
> > We don't pretend our eyes to have maps, & a
> > Waning evening grows old in three hundred nights.
> > Witch: you flower-eyed sorceress: each new look, the
> > World reconjures your face.
> >
> > KS
> >
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> Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
> Poems at Proximity: www dot proximity dot webhop dot net
>
> Our humanity is diminished when we have no mission
> bigger than ourselves.
> Bono
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