line 4 is a bit clunky, too, speaking of clinks...
--
Bob Marcacci
Patriotism is often an arbitrary veneration of real
estate above principles.
- George Jean Nathan
> From: Patrick Mc Manus <[log in to unmask]>
> Reply-To: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics" <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: Fri, 4 May 2007 11:57:00 +0100
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> Subject: Re: starpoem
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> Kasper Aha all very sf -not sure about 'clinks'sounds more cocktails than
> ceremony??
> Greets Patrick ragnarok'
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> Subject: starpoem
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> "cassiopeia"
>
> Water sang in the sky as if in a cave,
> Wet beads on godskin pulsing to sugar:
> While spring strains, this ceremony clinks.
> We don't pretend our eyes to have maps, & a
> Waning evening grows old in three hundred nights.
> Witch: you flower-eyed sorceress: each new look, the
> World reconjures your face.
>
> KS
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