kinda neat, Kasper, but I'd take another look & see if you can drop the
'like's & maybe find better verbs than the 'is' & 'are's, which seem to
slow things down for me, buffer the visceral....
Doug
On 23-May-07, at 3:16 PM, kasper salonen wrote:
> I've been trying out google docs. tell me if it works, & tell me
> something about the poem please. :) thanks
>
> http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_18rwnd2f
>
> KS
>
>
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