I did enjoy this (and wasn't confused).
I particularly liked the detailed description of the poppy bulb
being cut and bleeding.
But something bothers me.
The only connection between the present (China) and the past
is the poppy.
The rest of it doesn't seem to connect,
and I question whether you need to make a connection at all.
Would it perhaps be better to have two separate poems,
one about the present and one about the past?
Janet
> today I remember the smell of opium poppy by the rough hewn house
> Jan in a cheesecloth dress
(etc)
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity:
http://www.proximity.webhop.net
Our humanity is diminished when we have no mission
bigger than ourselves.
Bono
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