An intriguing, frightening, vision, Alison, but I wasn't sure about the
passive in the first (& part of the 2nd) stanza. There's a power
against which 'we' have no recourse? Yes, but 'we were woken' seems
almost too much so: 'we woke'?
The long lines, the near prose, as a kind of dream of a story 'we' or
'I' wish we could escape, has a growing force as the ode proceeds, but
I was a little put off by those 'were's....
Doug
On 26-Apr-07, at 8:21 AM, Alison Croggon wrote:
> Ode
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