Hi Douglas; thanks for that. Well, I guess in this story somebody woke them,
probably at gunpoint, certainly with threats, so agency is removed from
them, as well as identity, which is kind of the point...
xA
On 4/28/07, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> An intriguing, frightening, vision, Alison, but I wasn't sure about the
> passive in the first (& part of the 2nd) stanza. There's a power
> against which 'we' have no recourse? Yes, but 'we were woken' seems
> almost too much so: 'we woke'?
>
> The long lines, the near prose, as a kind of dream of a story 'we' or
> 'I' wish we could escape, has a growing force as the ode proceeds, but
> I was a little put off by those 'were's....
>
> Doug
> On 26-Apr-07, at 8:21 AM, Alison Croggon wrote:
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> > Ode
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