Thankyou.
I might do something which removes the only comma, and put it in the
present tense.
Roger
On 3/21/07, MC Ward <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Roger,
>
> I especially like the last two lines of this. Are you
> planning to develop it? (It strikes me as fine the way
> it is.)
>
> Candice
>
>
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> --- Roger Day <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> > head down, the cat wriggled from the night
> > her sleek little body tight with cold and dead
> > leaves
> > the drone and boom of jets
> > magnified the chill wind banging the loose vent
> > I moved from desk to door to night
> > looking for something I'd lost
> >
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