> I'd end it with the wonderful, Frank O'Hara style of
> that first stanza--Candice
Yes, I think that would work well, although it would be quite
a different poem.
I do like the stanzas with the barber and with James.
The repetition of "It's years past / the time for tears" strikes
me as rather maudlin, and perhaps unnecessarily personal in
a poem which is, as far as I can see, about poetry.
I'm not keen on the stanza beginning with
> > > I met a wiseman for lunch
...although it makes me think of Barry's latest poem.
Janet
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Poems at Proximity:
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Our humanity is diminished when we have no mission
bigger than ourselves.
Bono
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