I would echo Andrew's comments, but then I'm a neatness freak & like
everything tucked in, which is not an aesthetic strength or a procedural
recommendation, just a reader's first reaction. I like the dark
inventiveness of the imagery.
jd
On 2/9/07, Roger Day <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> cheers for the comments. I guess it marks a deliberate departure in my
> practice, looking outwards for subject-matter. Also, please note, no
> spelling mistakes. The Gmail spell-checker as it's uses :-)
>
> Roger
>
> On 2/9/07, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > ... and I love the dark humour of:
> >
> > rowers sweep up C-notes with their dark blue blades
> > birds line their nests a bright green shade this year
> >
> > Good one, Roger - rufrf'n'raw as such emotion(s) should be.
> >
> >
> > On 08/02/07, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > > Interesting shifts of perspective, Roger. Not sure of tone throughout,
> > > but really liked the 'sing sang-froid'....
> > >
> > > Doug
> > > On 8-Feb-07, at 7:25 AM, Roger Day wrote:
> > >
> > > > At night I lie on a neat stack of mustard-wrapped bundles
> > > > I fold and re-fold a Jackson
> > > > foreseeing disaster
> > > > at each turn of a leaf
> > > > the White-house is splattered
> > > > with jam
> > > > Jefferson smiles benignly as Erdinger bitter
> > > > spots his forehead
> > > > the walls are covered with Lincoln and Grant
> > > > Shiloh burns and young men cower by an unknown riverbank
> > > > I plink one string ... again ... again ...
> > > > the single C vibrates alone at midnight
> > > > rowers sweep up C-notes with their dark blue blades
> > > > birds line their nests a bright green shade this year
> > > > Jackson - who remembers him now? - lines the aircraft hold
> > > > the new order of the ages comes to the banks of the Euphrates
> > > > He will favour our venture in the depths of the sands
> > > > a sussurant wind catches the green-backs and the sands sing
> sang-froid
> > > > foreskins stacked like trash at the foot of the believer
> > > > here, Mother, wipe your eyes with this sawbuck
> > > > it won't bring him back but he died for the cause
> > > > thirty bucks for your youngest
> > > > enough for a Dragunov
> > > > may Allah be with you
> > > > and death to the Infidel!
> > > >
> > > > --
> > > > http://www.badstep.net/
> > > > "Patriotism is a virtue of the vicious."
> > > >
> > > >
> > > Douglas Barbour
> > > 11655 - 72 Avenue NW
> > > Edmonton Ab T6G 0B9
> > > (780) 436 3320
> > > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
> > >
> > > Latest book: Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> > > http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> > >
> > >
> > > The stars wheel over
> > > The Cross drops its image
> > > Into the watertank.
> > >
> > > David Campbell
> > >
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > http://www.bam.com.au/andrew
> >
>
>
> --
> http://www.badstep.net/
> "Patriotism is a virtue of the vicious."
>
--
Joseph Duemer
Professor of Humanities
Clarkson University
[sharpsand.net]
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