Thanks Janet, Kasper
This is what my reader said.
>Hmmm. 'the speed of sound at sea levels us'. It's cute but it doesn't
seem to fit.
>Not sure about the repetition of middle either - staying up in the
middle, middle of the night.
>Interesting use of the exclamation mark.
Sooooo - what do they call it in the coarser moments on UB Poetics? The
"cum shot"?
It's from a distinct memory of a long lecture of the importance of
listening, but you are right, Janet - it's neat, clever and lacks
connection. It's 14 in a pub. But it's where the thing started. Maybe,
given some thought, it may come around to fitting.
You are the most tremendously generous readers, you know...
caleb
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Sent: Friday, 9 February 2007 1:53 PM
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Subject: Re: Poem - Homecoming
I totally agree with Kasper.
Only the final sentence has me a bit puzzled:
> > ...On the surface
> > the speed of sound at sea levels us.
I have trouble connecting this with the rest. (That connection
thing again!)
Janet
> jesus. this is very, very good. I've come to expect poetry of a very
> high quality from you Caleb, & you haven't let me down.
> I may come back to interpret this.
>
> KS
>
> On 09/02/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > Homecoming
> >
> >
> > My father is a room of blue
> > of giant blue and anger
...
> > that leave no bruises. On the surface
> > the speed of sound at sea levels us.
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