ouch
On 2/21/07, S B <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> ouch
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> On 2/21/07, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > sorry, this is jutting & obtuse to me. "like fog" repetition is dull &
> > blunt, as are the short phrases. but that's only the second half; this
> > begins promisingly, but then that makes it all the more disappointing.
> >
> > KS
> >
> > On 21/02/07, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > > Fever, fog, bewilderment. Where
> > > is the edge of this dream?
> > >
> > > Someone has been killed.
> > > There is blood evidence.
> > >
> > > Elk, bears, and moutain goats
> > > are mating in the streets.
> > >
> > > This house is filled with past
> > > friends and lovers. It is dense
> > >
> > > with loss and pain. Like fog.
> > > Snow falls, thickly; but
> > >
> > > the landscape is bare. Women
> > > in bright dresses, cling
> > >
> > > to the wire fence. Their faces.
> > > Like fog. I am watching.
> > >
> > > Men kneel on the stones.
> > > Soldiers in bright uniforms
> > >
> > > carry their dark guns
> > > through the streets. I am
> > >
> > > watching. Brightness, through
> > > the fog. Bar the doors.
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > --
> > > ~ SB =^..^=
> > >
> > > http://www.sbpoet.com
> > >
> >
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>
>
> --
> ~ SB =^..^=
>
> http://www.sbpoet.com
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