And I'm really moved, really, that you would take the time to go back to
it, Kasper.
caleb
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of kasper salonen
Sent: Monday, 5 February 2007 11:34 PM
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: Late snap - apologies...
I have to say, I enjoy this poem 102% more now than I did the first few
reads. especially the gum & beetle effects.
KS
On 02/02/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Thanks Janet - Further to what I wrote before -
>
> >To be honest it's all over the place, slight, and the result of
trying
> >to write in a strange hotel room and from a strange emotional
position.
> >There's more in that shiny horned beetle than the rest, and there's
not
> >a deal in him. Ack.
>
> I suppose, at the very least, that the words have struck some people;
> but I'm still, on reflection, convinced that it was a process of
> imperfect, garbled and somewhat maudlin thought. You know? When it's
> 'around' the notion, like a schoolboy too frightened to ask someone
out,
> hovering and dithering? Got to get in there and think.
>
> Still - at least I'm not kneeling in front of the Flinders Street
> clocks. The footpath is so dirty there.
>
> Caleb.
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
> poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Janet Jackson
> Sent: Friday, 2 February 2007 1:12 PM
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: Late snap - apologies...
>
> Kasper says
>
> > "... without myth" is splendid.
>
> I agree.
>
> > the rest is unconnected & uninviting (though the imagery bits are
> clear &
> > good).
>
> It is hard to make a connection between the final stanza and the rest
--
> between the nature images and the people (beings?) and room.
> The word "graceless" seems to be the key.
>
> I wouldn't call it "uninviting" though. The reader is invited to find
a
> connection in their own way.
>
> Janet
>
> >
> > On 01/02/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > > Am I so graceless, unable to see
> > > at the first cautious whisper of rain,
> > >
> > > how the gum offers slight green gossip,
> > >
> > > how the dung beetle, anthracite teardrop,
> > > goes about his task without myth,
> > >
> > > how your eternal face fell
> > > as we left the room.
>
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> Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
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>
> The choice is between nonviolence and nonexistence.
> Martin Luther King Jr.
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