I quite liked the enjambments, and the subtle variations of stress.
P
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> Subject: Re: Poem: Poem
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> Not only redundant and repetitive, but it keeps repeating
> itself, saying the same thing over and over.
>
> Hal, wearing his critic hat
>
> "We don't serve fine wine in half-pints, buddy."
> --Robert Ashley
>
> Halvard Johnson
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> On Feb 16, 2007, at 11:17 AM, Jon Corelis wrote:
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> > Poem
> >
> > poempoempoempoempoempoempoe
> > mpoempoempoempoempoempoem
> > poempoempoempoempoempoempo
> > empoempoempoempoempoempoempo
> > empoempoempoempoetpoempoem
> > poempoempoempoempoempoempoe
> > mpoempoempoempoempoempoem
> > poempoempoempoempoempoempo
> > empoempoempoempoempoempoem
> >
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