When read with drums and flute, you might change your tune...
RE:
>and the the and and the the...
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>sparrows and crows and geese and buffaloes and eagles, oh my...
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>--
>Bob Marcacci
>
>The tendency of an event to occur varies inversely with
>one's preparation for it.
> - David Searles
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> > From: kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>
> > Reply-To: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry
>and
> > poetics <[log in to unmask]>
> > Date: Sun, 14 Jan 2007 23:04:17 +0200
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Subject: Re: poem...
> >
> > these images are all terribly bland to me. "v-shaped geese" &c.. there's
>no
> > feeling of inventiveness, which I think every good poem needs. this
>reads
> > like a pretty good country song (& that's not meant strictly as praise).
> > there are individual moments, "to sing with the drums" for instance. but
>the
> > flat symbols of reminiscing & the setup of pining for a lost loved one
>don't
> > appeal to me at all. sometimes those motifs do, but not unless they're
>done
> > exceptionally well.
> >
> > KS
> >
> > On 13/01/07, deborah russell <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>
> >> Your Long Eyes
> >>
> >> In the breaking voice of sparrows,
> >> I dream with the red brush;
> >> the clouds, hued with the eye of the sun,
> >> in the sky at the edge of mountains . . .
> >> The promise moon travels, far and wide,
> >> and raises the dust of your long eyes
> >> and the heaving breath of good news
> >> In your homeland, the sky is brightening
> >> Mingling in the flight of crows, a line
> >> of v-shaped geese in the distance, I
> >> walk the path, where buffaloes have gone,
> >> to sing with the drums, the moonlight and
> >> the breeze that ceases restless sorrow
> >> and unleashes the flight of the golden eagleŠ
> >>
> >> Deborah Russell, (c) 2007
> >>
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