Tight, & I like it, Tina,
though am tempted to suggest you change 'controversially' to an
adjective here (Ondaatje makes that move a lot & it toughens things,
sometimes). I hear a 'gentlemen, please' after the last word....<g>...
Doug
On 19-Jan-07, at 3:04 PM, Tina Bass wrote:
> knots
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> repeated sequences
> like snails
> sitting controversially
> and marking
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> they are not dancing
> and I am restless again
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> time
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