Hmmm...
I tried to send this with Fred's post at the end, but jiscmail refused
it, although they had let Fred's through... Anyway, here it is:
Things are a bit wacky at my end it seems. I'm getting responses before
the poems they respond to, & I'm certainly glad I got Fred's response,
Kasper, because the poem looks right in his post, but was stretched all
over the page in the one from you (that prosey lack of line breaks
again).
Given your answer, I'm not as bothered by the pear, although I agree
that the note about the Dali quote seems unnecessary; the images can
stand on their own (should be able to, or not)...
& now I see Patrick's point, as well, but would keep the pear more than
the whale, if keeping much of that last stanza...
Doug
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accusational eye of a discarded lover. . . .
Love’s absence
is still love, the heart a celestial wound.
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