> fresh and raw
(like so much meat:-)
I wonder whether this would be more powerful with line 5 reduced to
'as I lay myself upon you'.
Janet
> Ironing
>
>
> the strangest thing.
> a much anticipated moment
> blotched because I saw her; in my mind's eye
>
> pressing
>
> as I lay back or lay myself upon you
> seeing all of that
> attention to creases
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity:
http://www.proximity.webhop.net
The choice is between nonviolence and nonexistence.
Martin Luther King Jr.
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