or maybe the speaker's friends are all surgeons. ho ho ho.
:)
KS
On 21/12/06, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> I agree with Kasper - I found it disappointing, too.
> Janet
>
> > Kasper to me the last line is okay -it is obvious direct and sits well
> ??
> > P frozen P central heating died P
> >
> >> it carries the reader along nicely, only to let him down at the end.
> "open
> >> my heart"? surely there's something less obvious to end with.
> >>
> >> KS
> >
> > On 20/12/06, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > > one day
> > > to solstice
> > >
> > > all my days
> > > grow short
> > >
> > > they begin late
> > > they end early
> > >
> > > today the sky
> > > is wide pale blue
> > >
> > > the radio plays
> > > its seasonal songs
> > >
> > > the sparrows
> > > sing theirs
> > >
> > > all my years
> > > contract
> > >
> > > they shrink
> > > they pass
> > >
> > > quickly
> > >
> > > i am carried
> > > through them
> > >
> > > by time and love
> > > and loyalty
> > >
> > > by persistent
> > > determined friends
> > >
> > > who open my house
> > > to light
> > >
> > > who open
> > > my heart
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > --
> > > ~ SB =^..^=
> > >
> > > http://www.sbpoet.com
>
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> Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
> Poems at Proximity:
> http://www.proximity.webhop.net
>
> You cannot love alone
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