Doug says
> I liked the way this began but feel that it doesnt need to go on so
> long. I felt it had done most of what it seemed to want to do by
>
> And by nine quiet words
> and the slight nod of a
> face.
Indeed.
The problem is that the poem wants to do one thing and I want to do another.
In such cases the poem normally wins.
> Also not sure what you mean by 'whooed'...
a noise like the wind
thanks for the feedback Doug.
Janet
> > The answer to your question
> > can only be sung.
> > Can only be whooed with an umbrella-flipping wind
> > Can only be rained.
> >
> > It cannot be Googled,
> > found on Wikipedia,
> > archived,
> > written or spoken.
> >
> > But it can be born. The answer to your question can be born
> > in a plane or a tunnel
> > a revolving restaurant or a cave
> > a Hyatt or a fleapit.
> >
> > Then it will need to be rained.
> >
> > The answer to your question can be rained
> > by a guitar, can be tossed all over you
> > by the interplay of drums, can be splashed
> > hot onto your cheeks by the smile and flip,
> > pull and release of bass.
> >
> > And by nine quiet words
> > and the slight nod of a
> > face.
> >
> > ***
> >
> > Then the answer to your question can be felt
> > but you have to feel it yourself. You have to sit
> >
> > in the perfunctory hush of a non-denominational chapel
> > and cry into empty hands. Just-emptied, sweaty hands.
> >
> > Pray as someone who has never prayed before,
> > to presence which needs no name.
> >
> > Give thanks for the miraculous loss of a dream.
> > Then look at the stained glass and see, sun-backlit, the
> > face.
> >
> > ***
> >
> > Then sing and sing, in whatever voice you have.
> > Because remember what I said at the start.
> > The answer to your question can only be sung.
> >
> >
> > Janet
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity:
http://www.proximity.webhop.net
"Jars of springwater are not enough
anymore. Take us down to the river!"
Rumi, trans. Coleman Barks.
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