Well, it may be a specific horticultural term, but it really isn't abstruse,
it's in wide general usage.
I don't think we can go through Andrew's poem and rewrite it so
fundamentally. It would become a totally different piece, not by Andrew at
all.
best joana
----- Original Message -----
From: "biloxi andersen" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, October 12, 2006 1:31 PM
Subject: Re: snap Sweeping Lady of Tiayuan
> On 10/12/06, Joanna Boulter <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> "Weeping", in connection with trees, is specific horticultural
>> terminology,
>> and refers to the shape of the tree -- i.e. looking not unlike an
>> umbrella.
>> If you look at the photograph on Andrew's blog, you'll see what I mean.
>> The
>> term would have originated as a metaphor, but it's now pretty well
>> scientific in this context.
>>
>> best joanna
>>
>
> I didn't realise that. But you see, that's another reason why, imho, I
> don't like it yet again. It could be confused, by someone without a
> "specific horticultural terminology", or regardless, by someone
> expecting an emotional element to this piece.
>
> Still more, is a "specific horticultural terminology" that's "pretty
> well scientific in this context" needed? In this piece of verse? My
> humble opinion is that it's not at all, especially when it could be
> confused with a needless emotional meaning.
>
> I'm a fan of science and all, but I think verse, at least how I do it,
> has different needs. For example, here's piece from Her Lust is Wiser
> that's about a topic central to science; quantitative reasoning. But
> the language I use is as simple as "one, two, three", literally.
>
> He said
> I would've been much happier
> Had I thought in numbers
> One, two, three or nought
> After the fact I wrote
> Five, six, eight and two
> What does it all add up to
> She said
> Dismiss your eight and two
> Dismiss your eight and two
> Rouse, rouse, rouse or douse
> life is a whorehouse
> Life's got more without a doubt
> Tender loins than what you count
>
>
> Regards, Biloxi.
>
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