very nice, good use of repetition too. I can imagine that situation.
the last stanza is strongest.
KS
On 11/10/06, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> … shape of those bent shoulders
> and the entire body language
> speaks of resignation
> this lady sweeping leaves away
> under a weeping tree
>
> as tourists by the hundred
> walk passed her, not noticing her,
> staring at fading buildings,
> weathered sculptures of wood and stone.
> She is breathing on earth
> the same air as they, but
> working now, sweeping leaves …
>
> Holy holy holy her autumn breath,
> holy her work among the trees,
> holy her head more than ceilings of temples,
> her arms more holy than a winding dragon,
> her visage than the warrior's metal face.
>
> 11/10/2006
>
>
> --
> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> http://www.bam.com.au/andrew
>
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