Thanks, Kasper; I do appreciate your comments.
The middle stanza = the consequences of his having answered a siren song.
'Til you mentioned your confusion, I hadn't noticed my not adding an extra
line space after the first stanza (as after it). That might have helped
your understanding.
Judy
----- Original Message -----
From: "Kasper" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, September 20, 2006 12:09 PM
Subject: Re: Poem: Seaworthy
> wonderful ending especially Judy. I found the contrast between
> 'following sirens in the wake of storms' & 'folding faded flags' to be
> a bit much, & a bit inexplicable, but I liked the poem overall.
>
> K S
>
> On 20/09/06, judy prince <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> Seaworthy
>>
>>
>>
>> mate of long distance
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>> anchor, knot, caviling crew
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>> he heard a siren song
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>> and answered
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>>
>> now he follows
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>> the wake of storms
>>
>> his words seep
>>
>> he folds his flags
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>> neat, faded, spent
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>>
>>
>> yet
>>
>> at a midnight rail
>>
>> flares shoot in stunning arc
>>
>> and he feels the pull
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>> of his thrown line
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>> caught
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>> port-held
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>
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