rather good indeed. "full of cancer" shivered me a bit, in a good way.
what I dislike is the flow, there must be a way to change those
fullstops into continuations without disrupting the step-by-step
feeling (which is a good feeling). "Breathe" is a pretty bad ending,
stung me to read it.
very interesting progression, & well written.
K S
On 14/09/06, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I left my dreams behind
> on the sweaty sheets.
>
> Let them evaporate
> in the smoky air. Fires
>
> are closing in on us.
> This air shuts me out.
>
> Shallow, painful --
> the breathing. Ashes
>
> in my mouth. I sat
> with my neighbor
>
> on the deck, smoking
> cigarettes. She grieves
>
> her friend who died
> suddenly, full of cancer
>
> they thought they'd killed
> with drugs and radiation.
>
> Sudden, fierce, these
> fires. They ignite from
>
> nothing, a spark, a dry
> storm. They say, stay
>
> indoors. Don't breathe
> deep. My heart has
>
> hardened. A stone?
> A walnut? Perhaps
>
> a pinecone, prickly,
> waiting. Is there any
>
> seed left? The Buddha
> says, open. soften.
>
> Breathe.
>
> --
> ~ SB =^..^=
>
> http://www.sbpoet.com
>
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