There's some nice realism here, Heather, but I found 'until it drops to
ground zero' took a sudden turn away from children, football, into an
allusive space not touched anywhere else in the poem. I'm not sure such
a phrase can be used 'innocently' any more....
Doug
On 21-Sep-06, at 9:32 AM, Heather Taylor wrote:
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