Quite right, Frederick. The hyphen is gone.
(See below.) Thanks. Other changes may or
may not be in the offing.
Hal
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On Sep 22, 2006, at 12:17 PM, Frederick Pollack wrote:
> ----- Original Message ----- From: "Halvard Johnson"
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> Sent: Friday, September 22, 2006 11:20 AM
> Subject: "Maglev Sonnet"
>
>
> Maglev Sonnet
>
> A high-speed magnetic sonnet went off its track
> in northwestern Germany on Friday, killing at least
> one passenger and injuring several more, sources said.
>
> Officials at the scene described the sonnet’s first stanza
> as being totally mangled. “We must prepare ourselves
> for the fact that those lines are not living any more,”
>
> said one critic, who shall forever remain nameless.
> He was talking to emergency officials. Besides those
> first-stanza lines, two other quatrains were missing
>
> and feared dead. How fast the sonnet was traveling
> at the time of the accident was not immediately clear.
> Eighteen tropes are still trapped in tangled wreckage.
>
> The accident is another blow for magnetic levitation
> after a fire last month in a Shanghai-bound sonnet.
>
>
>
> Hal
>
> This is delightful, Hal, but I wish, no pun intended, it ended with
> more of a bang -- "sonnet" reappearing as the last word seems
> flat. Maybe something like "After last month's crash of the
> Shanghai Vilannele, / This is another blow for magnetic
> levitation" [no hyphen]?
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