An interesting take on this theme, Peter.
As i got to the end, & felt all those verbs, long though some might be,
collecting, the 'is's of this line seemed too weak; I think you could
just drop them & the line would be more powerful...? I might even drop
a few earlier....
But I really liked the way the commentary built as outrage....
Doug
On 22-Aug-06, at 11:19 PM, Peter Ciccariello wrote:
> The vista itself is hazardous the mimetic nature of vista is coming
> home
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