Yo Kasper, I see, like Beyonce, Lassie, Oprah and Judge Judy, you too have
the forename only thing going on. :)
If you want my opinion, I am baffled by your “top heavy” verdict and have no
idea what ths incoherent statement refers to. Please expand and tell me what
you mean in plain English, as this snippet of auto pilot blather struck me
as a catch all brain drip cliché of blandly forgettable criticism, offering
me zero insight. A bit like critiquing a text as "a muscular piece of
free-verse driven along a taut metrical line which robustly demonstrates I
am completely disengaged and have no real poetical grasp or understanding;
but that of waffling nonsense....blah blah blah."
Haiku is essentially about capturing a moment/experience in time, with a
shift after the second line, which I feel this haiku demonstrates. Maybe you
are confused because it is an innovative piece, dealing with the deeper
reaches of an intellectual experience you are yet to encounter. You choose
to have a dig at me for not adhering to the insular know-all view of, what
appears to me as, the delusional ego of someone with the poetic credentials
of a washing machine. I have only seen two of your efforts here. The first
one you posted I thought was very good and the second one absolutely dire
and obviously a work of no real effort.
"Tacky" carries the intrinsic connotation of "unoriginal"; but you will
find, if you google the various component word-combinations of my haiku,
that they are completely unque. Nowehere in cyberspace do the words
"goddess of your mind's mirror" whilst "mind’s mirror reflecting"and "no eye
can dismiss or reject" appear in that combination, whilst "Written rules of
life" – appears only in three or four other documents. So 85% or so of this
piece is completely unique and original, unlike your highly unoriginal and
hackneyed latest offering about moons and trees. Have a google of them and
see the millions who've already written those lines.
One thing which is definatley not original, is the depressingly self
important register of the all round unhelpfulness you are attempting to
dress up as friendly advice. No offence intended of course. :)
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