I also really liked this, Andrew, & wasn't so much bothered by the line
Stephen refers to; yet I can see that stopping that sentence at 'couch'
& then just shifting to the next one, would leave that implication to
grow through the poem.
Doug
On 23-Aug-06, at 10:36 AM, Stephen Vincent wrote:
>> *Prose Poem – The Syntax of their Hands*
>>
> I like the detail of this, Andrew, and the sense of 'shared
> vocabulary.' I
> find myself put off (or out of touch) by "on a couch with nothing in
> common
> between them but womanhood." Do I or you share a common sense of
> "manhood"
> when we sit on a couch with other men? It seems an outmoded concept or
> way
> of looking to me.
>
> Otherwise I really like the intimacy of this.
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