I read 'cawing crows' as 'cawing cows', I was disappointed it was just
birds cawing. they do it all the time, but cows..!
the metaphors & similes are mostly a bit clumsy, but all good in
general (lily-image is impeccable).
KS
On 23/08/06, deborah russell <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> For the Moon
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> The summer night is filled with uncharted ocean,
> cawing crows and the aroma of coffee.
> Nothing seems to faze the empty contents of
> swarming tourists; exhaust fumes swirl in the night.
> The air is heavy with music that drifts from bar to
> bar like a sailor on a weekend pass.
> The people travel like zombies, back and forth
> smelling of sour sunscreen and lotion.
> They move in unison - up and down the pavement
> from sun up to sundown and into wee hours.
> Not one stops to listen to the wail of the earth.
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> Under the street lights their smiles appear closer
> than you think, though they remain distant,
> miniscule and oblivious to everything around them.
> But you… you stop for the moon, listen to widow
> waves and watch the stars like lilies that bloom
> only in the dark. You, whose only link with their
> world is a faint memory of femininity; a Cinderella
> face behind a sheet of store front glass, You, who
> lives to exist and refuses to live in dreams of nothing
> but the treasure of wilderness, You - who dreams
> from the chrysalis; to follow the moon and listen
> each sun rise for the crow of the rooster.
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> Deborah Russell, (c) 2006
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> http://authorsden.com/deborahrussell
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