Like Andrew, although for different reasons (reading about an Aussie
trad from here), I enjoyed the story, Caleb. But I noticed, too much in
that I did notice, the passive voice in so many of the sentences, &
wasn't sure it was necessary. Unless you really wanted that feel...?
Doug
On 6-Jun-06, at 10:02 PM, Caleb Cluff wrote:
> A game of marbles
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