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> > I think "the heat of battle" is a bit of a cliche.
I see you solved that one Tina, with "the hearth of battle" - love it!
> >> a magpie
> >> overlooks
> >> more formal
> >> arrangements
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> Birds overlook the stupidity and fragility of humans. The "formal
> arrangements" refer to the formal arrangement of the human beings inside the
> ruins (on benches at regular intervals) and the formal arrangements of
> flowers dotted here and there inside the ruins. I've always thought that
> there was something ludicrous about having flower arrangements inside ruins.
When I read the poem I assumed that you were writing about formal gardens.
Not having been there, I didn't think of humans on benches or incongruous
flower arrangements. Perhaps it might be a more powerful comment if you
described these explicitly?
Janet
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Poems at Proximity:
http://www.arach.net.au/~huxtable/janet/proximity.html
"When one acts in accord with the time, the yang energy
is expansive, like thunder going out of the earth and
rising forcefully into the sky, startling an area of a
hundred miles with its rumble, so that all demons flee.
The life-giving potential continues increasing, and the
earth is always covered with yellow sprouts, the world
blooms with golden flowers. Wherever one may walk,
everywhere is the Tao. No happiness is more delightful
than this." Liu I-ming, trans. Thomas Cleary
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