Key West,
the long strip of highway to get there
water on both sides
small shops selling watermelons and fish
ice, ice cubes
and the sun everywhere
Key West seemed to me like a little Venice
with those yellow, pastel colored houses
good luck Rebecca,
Anny
From: "deborah russell" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, April 16, 2006 2:27 PM
> Dear Rebecca,
>
> The "apple trees" line is a reference to poetry - moving away from actual
> apple trees
> to a metaphor for poetry, specifically romantic poems.
>
> I should probaby rework that somehow.
>
> I hope you enjoy Keywest. In off season, it is a nice place to get away
> and relax. I spent the better part of one day, in Hemmingway's garden,
> writing. The gardens are nice, the hibiscus were blooming while I was
> there.
>
> Take care and keep well,
>
> Deborah
>
>>I can't say if it's what you mean to say, but the poem
>>seems stronger,
>>I still wonder at this line:
>>
>> > What do apple trees mean to you or anyone really?
>>
>>it's a good line, but I wonder why the speaker exempts
>>herself, why she claims some special knowledge that
>>makes her question only 'you or anyone' not herself.
>>
>> > There is no return to Eden, no end to selfish love
>> > stories
>>
>>this is good, I think, I don't know, I'm going to Key
>>West tomorrow and don't really want to go, in part
>>because there is no return to an Eden that would never
>>be from the beginning, but perhaps the orchids and the
>>mango ice and the cigars and even the salt air in the
>>palms will make me feel that again, as if present.
>>Some things are a torment, and you're lucky I think
>>that it resolves into words, hieroglyphics of exile,
>>birds, and stories, which I can see now, though I
>>couldn't in my first reading, is really central to the
>>poem. And that's nice, too, that feeling that when the
>>speaker is home she dreams of home and when she's home
>>she dreams of a pleasant island of grapefruits and
>>tangerines. So I think this revision has found sort of
>>its main tributary. And this poem, in general, is much
>>a development in your work.
>>
>>best,
>>
>>Rebecca
>
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