excellent, roger.
images work way well: candle-snuffing btn forefinger and thumb; cauterizing
w acrylic, graphite; pen dancing furiously on a notebook.
I'd like you to sub another concrete for "will stick in my craw", but do
keep the final line, "if I see you with him."
chirs, keep 'em coming,
joodles
----- Original Message -----
From: "Roger Day" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, April 01, 2006 2:51 PM
Subject: for beverley
I knew I was in trouble
when my friends caught me referring to you as if
you're my partner
I snuffed that particular candle between forefinger and thumb
I'm cauterising the open wound
with acrylic graphite oils pencil pen
I walked into Borders
and saw you enscounced amongst bookshelves
pen dancing furiously on a notebook
I walked away
still
it will stick in my craw
if I see you with him
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http://www.cb1poetry.org.uk/
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