Unless "February snow" is counted as one - I think the poem has three kigo:
1)February
2)snow
3)first of the year
deborah
>Doug - the norm in modern haiku in English is not to be enslaved to 5/7/5
>syllables, as Japanese onji are so short (as the syllables in 'po-ta-to').
>We try for maybe 3/5/3, but really aim at more the essence of haiku than
>its
>outer garments.
>
>So, with that said, I'd flick 'really the' in line 2. It gives the haiku a
>more expressive pace to go with 'flares', IMHO.
>
>Not meaning to teach my grandmother how to suck eggs, Doug -
>
>Regards -
>
>Andrew
>
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> > February's snow
> > really the first of the year
> > flares across the lawn
> >
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> > The stars wheel over
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