Deborah-The language for me of the first two lines seems different to the
rest of the poem(is in the title) -sort of tells you what is following -and
for me could be left out-(but maybe that's just me :-)
Bests P
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Subject: Re: early snap - perfect images
I'm not clear on what you are saying. What are you trying to match, Patrick?
>
>Perfect Images
>
>the soul's eyes
>hold perfect images . . .
>long hair
>in fiery screams
>snow/ice suspended -
>breathless - drifting
>stellar flashes;
>white teeth,
>dark, dove eyes
>slices of sun, juice
>drips from your lips
>and skin...
>prismatic beads
>slip around your feet
>sift through hands
>shatter the stars,
>crash the moon,
>there's a stutter
>deep inside . . .
>pause the heart
>(long enough)
>to make me believe
>again,
>in love
>
>Deborah Russell, C 2005
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