Ah, so Lorraine is the one who comes in to clean, so, the gloves. And I'm glad
my suggestions resulted in a pregnancy of possibilities!
best,
Rebecca
---- Original message ----
>Date: Wed, 8 Feb 2006 18:53:39 +1100
>From: Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
>Subject: Re: Snap
>To: [log in to unmask]
>
>Quoting Rebecca Seiferle <[log in to unmask]>:
>
>> I guess you have a new house and a new puppy, Max? but not a new wife?
sorry,
>> if I seem confused on the details, but the wife would be _Lorraine_?
>
>Ah, Rebecca, I admire your alertness, and keenness on piecing it all together. I
>was being clumsy. Lorraine is she who comes Friday afternoons and vacuums,
etc.
>Marilyn my wife is the (much younger than me) doter on dogs, and sometimes
>appears in my anecdotes as The wife, and the speech therapist.
>Your responsiveness to the details you go on to note is a big wake-up call to
>me. I'd been thinking, Oh another scrappy rendering of recent experience, and
>little potential after all. I now need to ponder, and maybe observe some more.
>Back to the vet today to be dispensed a spray which gets squirted at the
>inflamed private parts...and next week the stitches come out.
>Thanks for your observations, pregnant with possibility, so to speak.
>
>Max
>
>> This last image is vivid, maybe because images of injury always are:
>> >There's a black thread stitching his suture,
>> >and an inflamed empty scrotum
>> >just behind his idle little lipstick.
>>
>> and I felt sorry for the puppy, though that's the 'facts of life' for
>> domesticated
>> pets. But then I started to think, a mistake probably that usually follows
>> from a
>> thorn of a word that sticks in my cortex, but isn't there a great deal in
>> this
>> image, comparing an 'empty scrotum' a 'neutered prick' with a woman's 'idle
>> little lipstick'? Since I have worn lipstick a time or two, a rather
>> unpleasant
>> image results from the metaphor! and at least as compelling as nostalgia for
>> a
>> now 'empty scrotum'. Well, don't mind me if you don't like this response, but
>> there's a gender subtext sleeping in your poem, what with the two
squeamish
>> 12 year old girls, and you could push the poem into taking it on and take it
>> to
>> some other level. But, this may be just me, now I'm going to go back to
>> working
>> on those poems where I have a dick :)
>>
>> and best of luck with the new dog and the new house and the old (dare I say
>> it?)
>> wife,
>>
>> unneutered,
>>
>> Rebecca
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