Quoting Rebecca Seiferle <[log in to unmask]>:
> I guess you have a new house and a new puppy, Max? but not a new wife? sorry,
> if I seem confused on the details, but the wife would be _Lorraine_?
Ah, Rebecca, I admire your alertness, and keenness on piecing it all together. I
was being clumsy. Lorraine is she who comes Friday afternoons and vacuums, etc.
Marilyn my wife is the (much younger than me) doter on dogs, and sometimes
appears in my anecdotes as The wife, and the speech therapist.
Your responsiveness to the details you go on to note is a big wake-up call to
me. I'd been thinking, Oh another scrappy rendering of recent experience, and
little potential after all. I now need to ponder, and maybe observe some more.
Back to the vet today to be dispensed a spray which gets squirted at the
inflamed private parts...and next week the stitches come out.
Thanks for your observations, pregnant with possibility, so to speak.
Max
> This last image is vivid, maybe because images of injury always are:
> >There's a black thread stitching his suture,
> >and an inflamed empty scrotum
> >just behind his idle little lipstick.
>
> and I felt sorry for the puppy, though that's the 'facts of life' for
> domesticated
> pets. But then I started to think, a mistake probably that usually follows
> from a
> thorn of a word that sticks in my cortex, but isn't there a great deal in
> this
> image, comparing an 'empty scrotum' a 'neutered prick' with a woman's 'idle
> little lipstick'? Since I have worn lipstick a time or two, a rather
> unpleasant
> image results from the metaphor! and at least as compelling as nostalgia for
> a
> now 'empty scrotum'. Well, don't mind me if you don't like this response, but
> there's a gender subtext sleeping in your poem, what with the two squeamish
> 12 year old girls, and you could push the poem into taking it on and take it
> to
> some other level. But, this may be just me, now I'm going to go back to
> working
> on those poems where I have a dick :)
>
> and best of luck with the new dog and the new house and the old (dare I say
> it?)
> wife,
>
> unneutered,
>
> Rebecca
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