Jill thanksI see this as a poem where is all not explained -get feelings of
trouble-I seemed to read it in diferent ways-I liked reading other peoples
comments
Cheers Patrick
Ps I expect I will be the only one who had to check out(or admit!)
exculpation in the dictionary
Ps must feed Asbo aka VB aka Vile Boris
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Sent: 15 February 2006 05:27
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Subject: Re: snap - jones
I like this very much, Jill, the whole poem, even with
the way it does seem to 'struggle' if that's what
Stephen (?) said, conveys this feeling of struggling
with 'all my white secrets, of disfunction and the
lone/
of voice I used." Not to mention that "lone of voice"
is a most apt phrase, so telling with its echo of
loan. And so it's as if the poem itself can't quite
fit the feeling of not fitting the 'loose' as in
> as I've never pretended I fitted those loose
> areas of life round kitchen settings of others
> what would I have rathered - of course, not the
> truth
> which dissembles as it moves across the waters.
Anyway, I do think you're on a roll! (sheesh, I hope
that translates)
best,
Rebecca
--- Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Suddenly - within a moment which gives back
> all my white secrets, of disfunction and the lone
> of voice I used - quit exculpation! - I hacked it -
> the sawdust lines that part of sticking brain
> with its keys - yes, she walks by and smiles a bit
> could not be surprised - how is it? - uncontainable
> needy, all my revisions, hers, theirs, all my
> backflips.
> I can't pretend I'm just a table
>
> as I've never pretended I fitted those loose
> areas of life round kitchen settings of others
> what would I have rathered - of course, not the
> truth
> which dissembles as it moves across the waters.
> I might want to ask for some things back
> I could not expect any special orders.
>
>
> Jill Jones
> Sydney 15 Feb, 2006
>
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