Hi Stephen -I enjoyed the poem was trying to make a joke here!!I came across
one the other day where a guy was leaning against his car talking into a
phone -about 50 percent of the words were 'shit' came over as so moving
drama unfolding (yes I did slow down to here -those shoelaces) it could be a
performance piece -on page might look thick!!
It's Patrick if you were writing to me
Have good weekend
P patrick P although someone wrote Partick this week!
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Subject: Re: An Afternoon Snap
> Stephen -did she work in a bakery??:-)
> Thanks enjoyed that -what is the 2 after cake then
> P cakey P
Peter, I probably did not provide enough 'back fill' to make this found
quote story work.
Try two young black girls, one maybe eleven, the other maybe eight years
old, possibly sisters, one giving the other a kind of moral instruction - at
least that's my interp.
>
> łHe didnšt even like her when they first went out.
> He was just playing her. ("playing" means either deceiving or teasing)
> He just wanted a piece of cake.˛ ("cake" equals a possible sexual favor).
A kind of training to the younger girl on not falling victim to guys with
selfish agendas. At least that is my interp.
I just like the quick clarity of the story, the language: image and verb.
And implied sense of pronouncement, authority.
Stephen
>
> A sixth grade girl talking to a fourth grade girl waiting on the bus bench
> after school, corner of Church and 22nd Streets.
>
> Occasionally one is brought up short!
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> Stephen V
> http://stephenvincent.net/blog/
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