Colin, I think I would leave the question mark where it is. Sally J
>From: Colin Dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Walking
>Date: Wed, 25 Jan 2006 10:19:03 -0000
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>Sally J,
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>Thanks for your gardening. Would you put the question mark in a different
>position? I often ask this in the (overlong) sentences I use where a
>question gradually truns into a statement about something else.
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>Colin
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>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Saturday, January 21, 2006 1:26 PM
>Subject: Re: Walking
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>>I realy like this Colin for me just needed a bit of pruning I bracketed a
>>feww ords here and there. It is a very thoughtful and meaningful poem for
>>me. Best wishes SallyJ
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>>>From: Colin Dewar <[log in to unmask]>
>>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>>Subject: Walking
>>>Date: Fri, 20 Jan 2006 20:40:02 -0000
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>>>Walking downhill with Lucy
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>>>Because we are quiet the moment lasts.
>>>The sun outside the spruce lights the roe,
>>>before a footstep in the clearing sends it away.
>>How much time until
>>>your shoulder is too high to hold -
>>>to ask that you see what's there in every space
>>>you come to?( before you change it?)
>>>
>>>When you look (for it) you find your familiar self
>>>in the black mirror of the lochan,
>>>not the (any) self felt by hare or roe deer.
>>>Clouds come and go, make what they will of this temporary moon.
>>>Water lies stilled as memory,
>>>(as) when you come to (other ) people
>>>they appear, (as you) recalled from every room you've known.
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