Hi Calaya,
I enjoyed this, and I don't think I can add to what's been said elsewhere. I
probably wouldn't have the comma after "some say" in the first line, just
because it isn't there in the last line.
Regards,
Matt
>From: calaya <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: new sub: Two Rivers Dialogue
>Date: Mon, 23 Jan 2006 14:08:33 -0800
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> C & C, if you please.
> calaya
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> Some say, American Indians don’t built casinos.
> Talk, like fast water or slow water, resounds
> like two rivers flow - from shared origins,
>
> toward shared destinations. Yet, some
> talk like a kayak dropped down
> a mainstream river rapids- while others
>
> in the whirlpool wait to jump. Some talk
> within a circle, with a talking stick passed
> around; hold the stick, slow the pace;
>
> so everyone can know who’s next. Make
> and take time to consider what to say;
> listen closely to what’s said; like slow water.
>
> Some say American’s don’t gamble.
>
>
>
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