Hi Ryfkah,
Because we don't have a Thanksgiving Day in the UK I can only read this as a
stranger.
I'm also puzzled by the first line. Do you mean "A bush" (like a laurel or
rose-bush) or President Bush?
When I first read it I thought you meant George Bush (that's the only Bush I
know of in America these days!). But then, after reading on, I notice a lot
of small words missing from the poem. I can't see why they're not there!
Unless the small words, like an "a," have been omited later in the poem to
allow the 1st line to carry an ambiguity - If so, then that's mega
devious!!!
I've also got a couple of questions I've put alongside the text...
Bob
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Thanksgiving
>Date: Thu, 23 Nov 2006 12:41:32 EST
>
>EVERYDAY THANKSGIVING
>
>Bush in late afternoon shadow scrolls handwriting on (a/the) wall.
>Leaves like gold nuggets dance to (the) earth
>sky laden with gray heaviness like (a) woman heavy with child.
>Autumn rings its toll in carillon sound
>proclaiming Day of Thanksgiving throughout land. (Is it called "Day of
>Thanksgiving" or "Thanksgiving Day"?)
>
>But every day sings of my thanksgiving to G-d –
>good health like manna rains in daily life (was manna rain, or dew?)
>as children voices laugh in (a/the) falling wind
>angels disguised as strangers extend (a) helping hand
>while sun sparkles at play in (a) hide’n’seek sky
>work never bores but generates poems
>other mind pictures
>even (a) dog screeches unconditional love
>as innocent as newborn babe’s first smile and
>friends ring with welcome dinner invitations
>abundant as clouds gathered on celestial ceiling.
>
>With these blessings I am grateful and offer
>every day thanksgiving day in proclamation to (in proclamation? or, as
>proclamation??) G-d.
>
>Ryfkah
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