Thanks Christina, I have since changed soul to sole. Thanks for comments.
Glad Winston is alright, bw sally j
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
>Date: Tue, 21 Nov 2006 16:36:24 -0000
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>Hello there, Sally. I agree with the positive comments about your imagery
>but I don't agree with the soul being a 'no, no'. What I'm wondering is
>whether you could say the same thing (more or less) by changing the
>spelling to sole and leaving the reader to work out the sole/soul idea.
>The problem is that you have two soles unless you're on crutches. Can you
>cope with the idea of having two souls?
>bw
>christina
>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Saturday, November 04, 2006 10:18 AM
>Subject: new sub, Turning back the clock
>
>
>Turning back the clock.
>
>The moon, a foxes mad eye
>glares between stark branches
>of an unclothed tree.
>Spying in the twilight
>it creeps across moors
>still glowing from
>the aftermath of sunset.
>I walk upon the crumpled gown
>of autumn, each crackled tear
>sticking to my soul.
>Mist hovers in the hedgerows.
>Clouds circle my head, protect
>from the prickle of holly, yet
>droplets of berries still bleed
>in this star-less dusk.
>
>Sally James
>
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