Hello there, Sally. I agree with the positive comments about your imagery
but I don't agree with the soul being a 'no, no'. What I'm wondering is
whether you could say the same thing (more or less) by changing the spelling
to sole and leaving the reader to work out the sole/soul idea. The problem
is that you have two soles unless you're on crutches. Can you cope with the
idea of having two souls?
bw
christina
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From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, November 04, 2006 10:18 AM
Subject: new sub, Turning back the clock
Turning back the clock.
The moon, a foxes mad eye
glares between stark branches
of an unclothed tree.
Spying in the twilight
it creeps across moors
still glowing from
the aftermath of sunset.
I walk upon the crumpled gown
of autumn, each crackled tear
sticking to my soul.
Mist hovers in the hedgerows.
Clouds circle my head, protect
from the prickle of holly, yet
droplets of berries still bleed
in this star-less dusk.
Sally James
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