Arthur, I too think these work very well without the titles and especially
like the second poem. What popped into my mind reading the first was that
the empty pill cases were also the ragged lips of life.
bw
christina
----- Original Message -----
From: "Matt Merritt" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Monday, November 20, 2006 8:17 AM
Subject: Re: New sub: 2 Haiku
> Hi Arthur,
> I'm with Gill on these - both very fine poems, and better without the
> titles.
> Best wishes,
> Matt
>
>
>>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: New sub: 2 Haiku
>>Date: Sat, 18 Nov 2006 17:31:41 -0000
>>
>>Dear Arthur,
>>I really liked these two poems. I'm with Margaret in that I feel you don't
>>need the titles - in either of them. And I found the second of the two a
>>remarkably moving poem. I'd call it a gem!
>>sincerely,
>>Gill
>> ----- Original Message -----
>> From: Arthur Seeley
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Sent: Friday, November 17, 2006 3:01 PM
>> Subject: New sub: 2 Haiku
>>
>>
>> medication
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>> foil popped pills
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>> days weeks months
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>> the ragged lips of graves
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>> memento mori
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>> November
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>> a falling leaf
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>> taps my shoulder
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