Hi Arthur,
I'm with Gill on these - both very fine poems, and better without the
titles.
Best wishes,
Matt
>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: 2 Haiku
>Date: Sat, 18 Nov 2006 17:31:41 -0000
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>Dear Arthur,
>I really liked these two poems. I'm with Margaret in that I feel you don't
>need the titles - in either of them. And I found the second of the two a
>remarkably moving poem. I'd call it a gem!
>sincerely,
>Gill
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> From: Arthur Seeley
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> Sent: Friday, November 17, 2006 3:01 PM
> Subject: New sub: 2 Haiku
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