I'm certainly not getting fed up with any of your poems, Sally. There have
been so many good ones lately. It's just reminding me that I ought to sit
down and actually finish something soon!
You're right though. October and November are always productive for me. I've
got loads of ideas that need working on quickly, while the iron's hot, as it
were. Must get down to work this week
>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
>Date: Mon, 6 Nov 2006 08:58:16 +0000
>
>Hello Matt. Yes I think you are right about the soul bit. I am going
>through a creative phase at the moment but guess it will stop soon. October
>is always a very productive month for me don' know why this is. I also
>subsribe to another list as not much has happened here for a while. I have
>sent much more to this list. I think everyone will get fed up of me in a
>while. Thanks for comments
>Best wishes Sally J
>
>>From: Matt Merritt <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
>>Date: Mon, 6 Nov 2006 08:29:30 +0000
>>
>>Dear Sally,
>>I struggled a bit with "sticking to my soul" too, but probably only
>>because the rest of the poem is so well put together. I like Gill's
>>suggestion as an alternative, but there are lots of really strong images
>>there, especially the fox's eye and the berries.
>>Your output is putting the rest of us to shame at the moment!
>>Best wishes,
>>Matt
>>
>>
>>>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>>Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
>>>Date: Sun, 5 Nov 2006 09:32:17 -0000
>>>
>>>Dear Sally I like some of your images here very much, especially the
>>>fox's mad eye - brilliant. but there is a tiny suspicion of
>>>sentimentality in some of the lines that I would get rid of if it were my
>>>poem -'each crackled tear sticks to my soul' in particular. You could
>>>alternatively 'crack tears under your feet'- that would give strength and
>>>resolution to the poem as if you were casting off the past. And I'd
>>>change the title to setting the clock forward to enhance that idea.
>>>But it reads beautifully and it has a very fine lyricism. And Arthur is
>>>right: that lyrical voice of yours is gaining strength rapidly! I don't
>>>know your history, please forgive me if I've trodden on a toe.
>>>love,
>>>Gill
>>>
>>>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>>>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>>Sent: Saturday, November 04, 2006 10:18 AM
>>>Subject: new sub, Turning back the clock
>>>
>>>
>>>Turning back the clock.
>>>
>>>The moon, a foxes mad eye
>>>glares between stark branches
>>>of an unclothed tree.
>>>Spying in the twilight
>>>it creeps across moors
>>>still glowing from
>>>the aftermath of sunset.
>>>I walk upon the crumpled gown
>>>of autumn, each crackled tear
>>>sticking to my soul.
>>>Mist hovers in the hedgerows.
>>>Clouds circle my head, protect
>>>from the prickle of holly, yet
>>>droplets of berries still bleed
>>>in this star-less dusk.
>>>
>>>Sally James
>>>
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