Goodness, Sally, your history is so similar to mine. How are you doing now?
I hope wonderfully
Gill
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, November 05, 2006 1:26 PM
Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
> Thanks Gill. The" crackled tear sticks to my soul "has a double meaning it
> is a play on words, Tear as in ripped and soul as in sole of a shoe. My
> history is that of a lot of loss in recent years and illness which I am
> now coming through. Thanks and best wishes Sally J
>
>
>>From: Gill McEvoy <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: Re: new sub, Turning back the clock
>>Date: Sun, 5 Nov 2006 09:32:17 -0000
>>
>>Dear Sally I like some of your images here very much, especially the fox's
>>mad eye - brilliant. but there is a tiny suspicion of sentimentality in
>>some of the lines that I would get rid of if it were my poem -'each
>>crackled tear sticks to my soul' in particular. You could alternatively
>>'crack tears under your feet'- that would give strength and resolution to
>>the poem as if you were casting off the past. And I'd change the title to
>>setting the clock forward to enhance that idea.
>>But it reads beautifully and it has a very fine lyricism. And Arthur is
>>right: that lyrical voice of yours is gaining strength rapidly! I don't
>>know your history, please forgive me if I've trodden on a toe.
>>love,
>>Gill
>>
>>----- Original Message ----- From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>Sent: Saturday, November 04, 2006 10:18 AM
>>Subject: new sub, Turning back the clock
>>
>>
>>Turning back the clock.
>>
>>The moon, a foxes mad eye
>>glares between stark branches
>>of an unclothed tree.
>>Spying in the twilight
>>it creeps across moors
>>still glowing from
>>the aftermath of sunset.
>>I walk upon the crumpled gown
>>of autumn, each crackled tear
>>sticking to my soul.
>>Mist hovers in the hedgerows.
>>Clouds circle my head, protect
>>from the prickle of holly, yet
>>droplets of berries still bleed
>>in this star-less dusk.
>>
>>Sally James
>>
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