Dear Sally,
I'm with Bob here; but did think that in the last three lines of the poem
you have almost got a natural haiku; is that perhaps what it should become?
every good wish,
Gill
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From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, October 14, 2006 8:15 PM
Subject: new Sub Autumn
> Autumn
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>
> Every soft sigh of earth mellows
> in twilight hours
> as the ancient tick of time echoes
> over moon silvered moors.
>
> Not a sound to be heard
> when each day shortens
> only the creak of the oak tree
> and groan of dead leaves
> falling.
>
> Sally James
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